dispirited and outgrown Winter has opened out, parasolled to Spring from budded cocoons, from blooms, in hazy hints of dress the confetti leaves tease valour, of future Greatness this feels divine, Butterfly feels like falling inwards take my hand now, cliff edge is bliss, worth the risk we can fly when we lose our feet anchor.
Oh, my Butterfly, this is divine! Although it may snow tomorrow, today is very warm, and the spring breeze blowing across my porch, accompanied your beautiful poem… thank you!
Very nice indeed. A minor technical point - I happened to get this by email as well and the last line is different. ‘comes next’ vs ‘is coming next’. For my tuppence I think the flow of syllables is better with the former, although either way the importance of wanting surprises is a fine sentiment.
Thanks Edgar, I had danced between the two to see which worked. Reflected on original being too sudden and had changed post email, but I prefer that now. Always appreciate your close attention and feedback.
Nothing like getting Spring back into your step.
Your last stanza was the bow on your wonderful poetry gift ✍️🎁😊
She's back... she's back!
(Very kind. Thanks for saying that, Marjorie)
Le petit prince! Magic, Nat!
Oh, my Butterfly, this is divine! Although it may snow tomorrow, today is very warm, and the spring breeze blowing across my porch, accompanied your beautiful poem… thank you!
Hey, that's lovely, thanks for saying that!
My pleasure!
Beautiful, Sea! Really enjoyed the voice, the imagery, and the rhyme.
Pretty
Love Nat! Thanks!
Very nice indeed. A minor technical point - I happened to get this by email as well and the last line is different. ‘comes next’ vs ‘is coming next’. For my tuppence I think the flow of syllables is better with the former, although either way the importance of wanting surprises is a fine sentiment.
Thanks Edgar, I had danced between the two to see which worked. Reflected on original being too sudden and had changed post email, but I prefer that now. Always appreciate your close attention and feedback.
beautiful. 🌷
Thanks Freya!